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The topic was interesting but the introduction needs more background context to draw in more of an audience. There are not really any attention grabbers, such as an interesting fact or a story. Also the title could be more of an attention grabber because the title makes the article sound like an informational. The topics are introduced as a questions, which is good for organization and helping people follow the article. I like how the author added the questions because it opened my eyes on genetically modified organisms and all the different aspects of them. The transitions could be smoothed out better so that the relationships between the different topics are shown. It is effective that the topics are clearly outlined and described in each paragraph. However, the topic can be further expanded on to lengthen the article and provide a human touch to the paper. I like how there are questions that are used to introduce the next topics because it lets the readers know what the authors thought process is. I would like to hear more information about the human organ growing, that is a very interesting topic. It can also be used to expand on. The draft also needs a conclusion, but it is only a draft so it not a problem. The conclusion can be used to summarize your personal opinion about genetically modified feed or animals. Also I would have liked to see some more of the other side of the argument, such as cases of when a genetically modified organism went wrong. All in all I like the article, it is interesting and informative. The article could use some polishing but this is only the draft so it is fine.